Thursday 1 May 2014

Freedom - Five Sentence Fiction #6

       He looked at her for a moment and turned his back on her.

       For a millionth time again he felt like she didn't like being with him there; that she was crying silently.

       He had hoped against hope that she would come around and learn to be happy over time but that had never happened.

       With a heavy heart, he opened the door that held her captive.

       A sad smile crossed his face as he saw the tiny bird fly away, as if rejoicing its new found freedom more than the safety of the golden cage.

image source: darlenesabella.blogspot.com

PS: Linking this post to Five Sentence Fiction.

Until the next post,
Keep Smiling :)

Love,
Swathi :)

27 comments:

  1. You left out a detail which might have made it MORE COMPLETE.
    True he did let her out of the golden cage which held her food and water. He now allowed her to have the FREEDOM of the room with its closed door and windows, where she could always fly back to the comforts and safety of her cage. To have allowed her TOTAL FREEDOM might have ended her life shortly. WELL DONE !!! I'd love to read your comment on my endeavor for this week.

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    1. You are right robin. That might have been more complete when the bird loved him back. But since it didnt, the only freedom it would desire was to fly free. That's how i thought. Thanks for ur insight :)

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  2. This was lovely. This reminded me of my dad getting me a parrot and then letting it go because he felt it was crying :P...Then I cried!

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    1. Oh red! Isnt it difficult to let go of the bird that we love?

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  3. What a beautiful picture of freedom. :)

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  4. The comfort of gilded cage or the spaciousness of a large room bounded by walls would never give the sense of freedom as flying into the unrestricted open space.
    You seem an expert in crafting very nice five sentence stories

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    1. True that is. Freedom matters the most :) Thanks KP :)

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  5. Beautiful. To leave the comfort, security and food is difficult but yes freedom is more important.

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  6. Ah! The sense of freedom!

    Well written! :)

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    Please check my post for the details.
    http://tulipsandme.blogspot.in/2014/05/a-liebster-award-from-michelle.html

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    1. Thank you so much preethi ^_^ It's an honour to be receiving this one from you :)

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  8. It may be pathetic to let someone you love go like this, isn't it the true comperehension of love. Very beautifully written...: )

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    1. But isn't it more pathetic to hold them captive! Thanks Namrata :) Keep visiting :)

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  9. Lovely story... i loved the concept! Freedom is of utmost happiness to everyone!

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  10. Oh this is simply beautiful! What a lovely ending :) Perfect piece, Swathi!

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  11. Perfect for freedom; leaving the cage to fly away free. Beautifully done. x

    http://40somethingundomesticateddevil.blogspot.co.uk/2014/05/freedom-five-sentence-fiction.html

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  12. I love how this can be symbolic for much more than a bird's freedom, lovely!

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