Amar dragged his feet through the streets, keeping his ear to the ground as he tried to unearth the mystery behind the explosion from the gossips of the people!
He had got a real kick in teeth when he heard about the accident and though he had been preparing himself ever since, he had a gut feeling that it wouldn't be easy to face the truth!
People were eye to eye saying "The poor couple lived alone; wonder where their son was instead of looking after them at such ripe age" and Amar felt an egg on his face hearing those accusations, which he knew he deserved!
He remembered the phone calls his old mother used to make, asking him to come back, for they longed to see his face and the excuses he used to give, for he didn't want to return to the village leaving the comforts of The States!
A tear escaped his eyes as he walked through the broken doors of the house, reminiscing the time he had spent here with them and wishing he had flew back when he still had a chance to make them happy!
PS: Linking this post to Five Sentence Fiction - Doors and Write Tribe - Wednesday Prompt 2014 #14.
Until the next post,
Keep Smiling :)
Love,
Swathi :)
wish he could make it :| well written (Y)
ReplyDeleteAnother wonderful story with a meaningful concept!! Well done!
ReplyDeleteThanks nibhz :)
DeleteYou have fused both the prompts effortlessly.
ReplyDeleteThanks kalpana :-)
Deletevery nice use of the prompts to make a meaningful story!
ReplyDeleteThanks titli :)
DeleteWow! You have merged the prompts well! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks pooja :-)
Deletevery creatively merged and written :)
ReplyDeleteThanks ankur :-)
DeleteA sad story and such things happen often.
ReplyDeleteTrue KP!!
DeleteNicely crafted tale!
ReplyDeleteThanks tarang :-)
DeleteSuperb take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteThanks red :-)
DeleteA wonderful tale woven around the prompt.. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks anushree :-)
DeleteSad...but not rare.
ReplyDeleteTrue that is!!
DeleteI loved the merge of prompts! Brilliant take :)
ReplyDeleteThanks soumya :-)
DeleteAh a very poignant tale. So moving!
ReplyDeleteThanks ma'am :-)
DeleteIt's sad when people leave their parents for money and success
ReplyDeleteBroken Door - Five Sentence Fiction
True cifar! Bt such things happen :(
DeleteGreat take !!
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteAah! The guilt and the regrets...
ReplyDeleteWonderfully crafted story!
Thank you Shilpa :)
DeleteThis is probably a reality for so many. Very well written and 2 prompts in one. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you Suzy :)
DeleteWow, great solution to the challenge. Powerful writing...
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Romance & Mystery...writing my life
Thanks Donna :)
DeleteThis was heartbreaking!! :(
ReplyDeleteBut a lesson we should learn!
DeleteThere's always some guilt, and some regret ! Lovely blend of the prompts. You're brilliant, dear :)
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Sreeja :) :) :)
DeleteBeautiful blend and wonderfully orchestrated
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Thanks Naba :)
DeleteA good, though sad, story with the extra difficulty of combining two challenges!
ReplyDeleteThanks K R Smith :) Yes it was a little difficult, but well why not :D
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